Virginia, this is deceptively simple, and as a writer of picture books, I know how hard that is to do. Nicely done! I particularly like your use of "Look, look." Such a great way to catch a child's attention, and with words they are likely to say. I agree with Bonnie about adding a line that describes the person at home, and also understand you dilemma with word count. Looking forward to seeing what you come up with.
Shannon, I really love the message that tells a child they can do whatever they dream. I did have just a little trouble with the rhythm on the line "sealed my fate." My brain wanted another beat at the beginning.