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Bonnie commented on Good Morning Sun

Nice story, Laurel! I like the rhythm of the book and the way that the simple story with objects that the caregiver and child can point out throughout the day. It makes the story so much more than just a book to read! A few small suggestions:
"Good morning teeth
Good morning brush
Good morning soap
Good morning flush :)" - either change to and good morning flush like the other lines where the fourth line is still a good morning line or try something not good morning to keep with the format of the rest of the book.

Considering changing mug to cup - I don't think young kids drink out of mugs.

Maybe change pants to tights so it doesn't sound like the child is wearing a skirt over tights?

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Bonnie commented on Mom and Nate's Cooking Date (revised)

Great, thanks so much for these suggestions, Roseanne!

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Bonnie commented on Why Walk When You Can Run?

Hi Yael,
Nice work and cute story. One suggestion would be to work on the rhythm/rhyme scheme you have going. Try to keep the same number of syllables in each line from page to page. It makes it easier for caregivers to read and makes the rhythm of the book more catchy.