Hi there, by and large, this seems to be a very good idea. Just a few suggestions: 1. try to avoid using abbreviations or explain them at the first use (MOOCs). 2. This write-up provide a general idea of what you want to do, but the specifics are missing. How many children would benefit, how many teachers would be trained, how much budget is required, do you need budget only, or do you need technical support as well; who is going to develop those lessons/games etc. and most important how long would it take to complete.
Answers to the above questions would make it a very specific, and make it easier for the donor to decide whether to fund this initiative or not (though I don't know if it has been put up here for donors).