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a DADDY on the loose

A funny and tender tale about a child's search for her father

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Somewhere in the city is a Daddy on the loose.

He looks like this…

Shiny head

Stripy legs

Pointy nose

Curly moustache

 

A daddy like that is hard to miss.

If you do chance upon him, BEWARE!


This Daddy sneaks behind…

And TICKLES you in places that makes you squeal.


This Daddy lifts you up in the air…

And ZOOMS you away in a jet plane – half way round the world.


Don’t you ever ride on his back...

Because he GALLOPS you to places so far - you'll reach the moon.


Erin’s out on the search to find this Daddy.

Can you help? (illustration note: Mom and Erin catches the bus)

Remember…

Shiny head

Stripy legs

Pointy nose

Curly moustache.

Shout DADDY when you see it.


Is he on the bus? 

Erin spies lots of heads.

Black, brown, blue, green, yellow, red, and…

(illustration note: Mom carries Erin and stands in the back of the bus, where there’s a full view of heads with different hair color, different head covering such as caps, hats, veil and 1 bald head)

Shiny head…do you see it?

DADDY!

But he’s not.


Is he in the store? 

Erin spies lots of legs. (illustration note: Erin walks holding Mom’s hand. )

Spotty, dotty, flowery, spotty-flowery, dotty-flowery and…

Stripy legs…do you see it?

DADDY!

But she’s not. (illustration note: a lady in striped pants)

 

Is he in the park?

Erin spies lots of Daddies.  (illustration note: Daddies on benches reading newspapers)

A nose peeps out as she walks past.

Pointy nose…do you see it?

DADDY!

But he’s not.


Erin does not cry. She’s tough just like you.

But it is almost nap time.

Where is this Daddy?

Her eyes feel heavy and soon they close. (illustration note: Erin in Mom’s arms asleep as they walk down the road)


A soft tickle on her face wakes her.

Strong hands pick her up…

and hug her close.

Curly moustache…do you see it?

DADDY!

It really is him.

Describe the intended vision for your early childhood book manuscript in 1-2 sentences

I envision this book to be funny, interactive and engaging for both the child and the caregiver. The illustrations play an important role in bringing forth the humor.

Share your suggested book title

a DADDY on the loose

PLEASE USE THE VERSION OF THIS QUESTION AT THE TOP OF THE SUBMISSION FORM: Share a draft of your manuscript (250 word limit, not including title).

Somewhere in the city is a Daddy on the loose. He looks like this… Shiny head Stripy legs Pointy nose Curly moustache A daddy like that is hard to miss. If you do chance upon him, BEWARE! This Daddy sneaks behind… And TICKLES you in places that makes you squeal. This Daddy lifts you up in the air… And ZOOMS you away in a jet plane – half way round the world. Don’t you ever ride on his back... Because he GALLOPS you to places so far - you'll reach the moon. Erin’s out on the search to find this Daddy. Can you help? (illustration note: Mom and Erin catches the bus) Remember… Shiny head Stripy legs Pointy nose Curly moustache. Shout DADDY when you see it. Is he on the bus? Erin spies lots of heads. Black, brown, blue, green, yellow, red, and… (illustration note: Mom carries Erin and stands in the back of the bus, where there’s a full view of heads with different hair color, different head covering such as caps, hats, veil and 1 bald head) Shiny head…do you see it? DADDY! But he’s not. Is he in the store? Erin spies lots of legs. (illustration note: Erin walks holding Mom’s hand. ) Spotty, dotty, flowery, spotty-flowery, dotty-flowery and… Stripy legs…do you see it? DADDY! But she’s not. (illustration note: a lady in striped pants) Is he in the park? Erin spies lots of Daddies. (illustration note: Daddies on benches reading newspapers) A nose peeps out as she walks past. Pointy nose…do you see it? DADDY! But he’s not. Erin does not cry. She’s tough just like you. But it is almost nap time. Where is this Daddy? Her eyes feel heavy and soon they close. (illustration note: Erin in Mom’s arms asleep as they walk down the road) A soft tickle on her face wakes her. Strong hands pick her up… and hug her close. Curly moustache…do you see it? DADDY! It really is him.

How has this book been informed by early childhood language development research and evidence? (response minimum 250 Characters)

I have used simple words that young children are familiar with (most Tier 1 words). Some words have been highlighted for caregivers to read them with expression and by changing the tone of voice to evoke humor or action. There’s also predictability through repetitions of phrases that will encourage the child’s participation. Caregivers have the flexibility to introduce colors and patterns through the text and illustration.

Please describe any familiarity you may have with Philadelphia and its residents? (optional question)

none except from your resources. I have made frequent visits to the US, but I have never lived there.

How have you crafted this manuscript to resonate with and/or reflect the experiences of those living in urban contexts? (optional question)

The topic of the story - attachment between a child and her father - is universal and would resonate with any child in any country with a male figure in the family. So also are the elements of the story, such as the bus, the store, the park are all universal aspects of any urban city in the world.

Location: Country

Indonesia

Location: State or Department

Jakarta

Location: City

Jakarta

Tell us more about you / your team

Shoba is currently a freelance consultant for early childhood education. She has over 15 years of experience with child-centered curriculum and practices. As a consultant, she has worked with the Directorate General of Early Childhood Education on several occasions preparing and reviewing teaching manuals. Shoba is also passionate about writing. Her books on early childhood education has been published locally. She also collaborates with non-profit organizations such as 'Room To Read' to create children’s books that are made accessible to children all over Indonesia.

Multiple Choice - Have you been previously published (online, self-published, and print included)?

  • Yes

If yes, please list titles and publications.

"I can do it" a Room to Read publication for distribution in Indonesia. “Janggan Dragon Kite" is a picture book that was long listed for the Scholastic Picture Book Award, 2015, currently being processed for publication by Scholastic Asia.

Do you have an agent?

  • No

How did you hear about the Challenge? (optional question)

  • OpenIDEO announcement email

What best describes you? (optional question)

  • I am/we are creatives, writers, or artists

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Photo of Itika Gupta
Team

Hi shoba Dewey  Welcome to the Challenge Community!
It truly is a tender tale of child and his/her amazing daddy.
How might you evolve your manuscript to introduce new nudges of engagement and interaction for caregivers, to help them with their child’s learning development as they narrate the story? You can find some inspiration in the Final Toolkit and Challenge Resources listed on the challenge page

Photo of shoba Dewey
Team

Thank you, Itika, for your feedback. I'll try to make revisions in whatever little time there's left before the deadline.

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